I know I said I was going to do a posting on the Night Terrors phenomenon and how they tie into the Birthrite series. Well, with releasing my short story, The Cemetery by the Lake, getting the Horror Realm Interviews posted, as well as getting things that due soon together (including having the final drafts of "Descent" and "Sacred Atonement" ready to go for late spring/early summer), I'm going to have to push that to next week. Things just piled up this week, and before I knew it was Thursday (Blog Post Day).
BUT to make it up to you guys, I'm giving you one of the more recent drafts of Chapters 18 and 19 of "Descent." They are actually two of the new scenes that are not present in the first draft.
One of the greatest flaws I saw with the first draft was the lack of showing any real relationship between Dorothy and her mother (which is pretty essential). Part of this was due to the fact that I hadn't intended for Dorothy (or really anyone from Book 1) to be such an integral part of the story. In fact, as I stated in one of my vlogs, what ended up being the entirety of Book 1 was only supposed to be a Prologue and the first couple chapters of the book. What was supposed to be the rest of Book 1 ended up being Book 2 (and the story of Dorothy and Carl ended much differently and it just was not right...characters can be really stubborn if you're not telling their story the way it should be).
So in later drafts, I established relationships a little more prior to all the events taking place. I establish Carl a little more (we get inside his mind a little more).
Here are Chapters 18 and 19. These are from a more recent draft, meaning I'm still editing. :)
Read after the jump. :)
My short story, "The Cemetery by the Lake" is now available at Smashwords as a FREE download. More retailers will follow, but Smashwords is pretty compatible with most e-reader and PC formats.
The Cemetery by the Lake on Smashwords